Very enjoyable. This piece seems to be less about explaining the world, and more about the characters. The first piece did emphasise that this world was quite quite different from the normal human world. This one doesn't really comment on that so much, it just focuses on the story. It leaves me feeling that there is definitely a place it is going :)
I like it :)
I think it could benefit from a few other bits about the world differences being thrown in to more ease the style as you begin to focus on the story more.. does that make sense?
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Date: 2010-03-19 01:14 pm (UTC)I like it :)
I think it could benefit from a few other bits about the world differences being thrown in to more ease the style as you begin to focus on the story more.. does that make sense?